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Dark maiden,
Ashen heart,
Feigned your love,
And tore me apart.

Deathly girl,
Tainted dream,
Spread your wings,
And made yourself queen.

Cold mistress,
Bane of maids,
Let us be
Until twilight fades.

Fanged lover,
Won't you bite?
None else here -
Come again tonight.
©2005-2009 ~SuccubiUnited
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A deviation originally by ~ DreamerOfShadows. Please post comments on his page.
Original: Here
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Didja know that "succubus" almost literally means "one who lies under"? Creepy...

i really have no idea what..er, possessed...me to write this one...i was just casting around for creepy topics to throw a chill down a few backsides...

BTW, this poem doesn't necessarily have to refer to hot demon women who are after our bodies (i'm addressing the guys in this)...it can refer to too much of something, or a guilty pleasure, like ice cream or "Desperate Housewives" reruns...*cough* those sluts *cough*!

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:iconcharsi:
I like this piece.. I hardly ever read any of the written stuff here on DA but this is just to my liking :)

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I am not good at poetry, but i liked it (: It sounds like a spell

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very nice fantasy piece ^^

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~Rae
-We have free will because even though we'll always do what we always did, we didn't always know at the time we were doing it that what we were doing has always been what we were going to do anyway-

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